thảo luận Practicing English with vOzers :D

[tangkiemandao]

Oh, I see. The stay-at-home order is now lifted so everything will come back to normal soon

Yes, but I think we should be careful.
I'm hoping baber shop near my house open

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[Fone Man]

Yes, but I think we should be careful.
I'm hoping baber shop near my house open

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Ya, you're right. We still have to remain social distance, wear face mask and keep good personal hygiene. The world out there is still under fire so we should not let our guard down I've been staying home for more than a month and only go out for food once every fortnight You better keep your hair uncut for another month to save yourself and your money buddy

 

[Pax]

My writing is too poor

Can english teachers here essess the basic paragraph below? Thank you.

Although it has been many years ago, I never forget the first time to have watched a movie in the cinema. I come from a countryside where I find it hard to find a movie theater. My dream finally came true when I studied university in HCM city. After I had finished the class, I was so joyful to go to the cinema to enjoy the film. I felt so happy when I beheld the chair, the large screen and the modern air-conditioner. While I was enjoying the movie alone, there are many couples hugging together under the fresh air of the AC. The movie lived up my expectation, and that memory never fades in my mind.

 

[Fone Man]

My writing is too poor

Can english teachers here essess the basic paragraph below? Thank you.

Although it has been many years ago, I never forget the first time to have watched a movie in the cinema. I come from a countryside where I find it hard to find a movie theater. My dream finally came true when I studied university in HCM city. After I had finished the class, I was so joyful to go to the cinema to enjoy the film. I felt so happy when I beheld the chair, the large screen and the modern air-conditioner. While I was enjoying the movie alone, there are many couples hugging together under the fresh air of the AC. The movie lived up my expectation, and that memory never fades in my mind.

Not sure if it is good enough but I hope this helps

Although it has been many years since the first time I watched a movie in the cinema, I still remember that feeling/experience/....I came from the countryside where it was hard to find a movie theatre, so watching movie there was always my desire. My dream finally came true when I moved to HCM city to study in a university. On that day, I went to the cinema after class and I was so excited for enjoying a movie for the first time. I felt so happy to experience the comfortable chair, the large screen and the modern air-conditioner, despite the fact that I was enjoying the movie alone while surrounded by many couples hugging each other under the fresh air of the AC. The movie lived up to my expectation and this memory will never fade from my mind.

 

[Pax]

Not sure if it is good enough but I hope this helps

Although it has been many years since the first time I watched a movie in the cinema, I still remember that feeling/experience/....I came from the countryside where it was hard to find a movie theatre, so watching movie there was always my desire. My dream finally came true when I moved to HCM city to study in a university. On that day, I went to the cinema after class and I was so excited for enjoying a movie for the first time. I felt so happy to experience the comfortable chair, the large screen and the modern air-conditioner, despite the fact that I was enjoying the movie alone while surrounded by many couples hugging each other under the fresh air of the AC. The movie lived up to my expectation and this memory will never fade from my mind.

Thank you, bro.

I find it more smooth. I am going to revise and fix my work.

 

[iMin]

My writing is too poor

Can english teachers here essess the basic paragraph below? Thank you.

Although it has been many years ago, I never forget the first time to have watched a movie in the cinema. I come from a countryside where I find it hard to find a movie theater. My dream finally came true when I studied university in HCM city. After I had finished the class, I was so joyful to go to the cinema to enjoy the film. I felt so happy when I beheld the chair, the large screen and the modern air-conditioner. While I was enjoying the movie alone, there are many couples hugging together under the fresh air of the AC. The movie lived up my expectation, and that memory never fades in my mind.

Try some different approaches on telling your story. Hmm I mean don't just repeat the structure [S+V] all the time like that, some of your sentences could be rephrased into a phrase like [After I had finished the class] into after class, [I come from a countryside] into as a countryside boy, it was hard for me to... and such. Text filled by repeating structures are monotonous.
behold <- don't use this word, see/saw is enough. This word in your text feels like a steak served with mắm tôm, not necessarily wrong, but they don't go along.
[ I studied university ] you attend a university or you study in a university, [study a university] is something else.
Oh and these [ I never forget ] and [that memory never fades] would sound a bit smoothier in future tense. I don't know if it's wrong or not, I just feel so.

 

[Pax]

I had an attack by a fever. Also, I have been busy lately, so I can't read and reply all your comments. Hopefully, I have more time to do it.

In my opinition, taking dictation is a good method for us to enhance listening skills, as well as vocabulary. I am in habit of doing this 02 hours on a regular basis. It is about patience, you should try it.

 

[Pax]

Try some different approaches on telling your story. Hmm I mean don't just repeat the structure [S+V] all the time like that, some of your sentences could be rephrased into a phrase like [After I had finished the class] into after class, [I come from a countryside] into as a countryside boy, it was hard for me to... and such. Text filled by repeating structures are monotonous.
behold <- don't use this word, see/saw is enough. This word in your text feels like a steak served with mắm tôm, not necessarily wrong, but they don't go along.
[ I studied university ] you attend a university or you study in a university, [study a university] is something else.
Oh and these [ I never forget ] and [that memory never fades] would sound a bit smoothier in future tense. I don't know if it's wrong or not, I just feel so.

Thank you for your time to write this, I appreciate it.

I noted your advice. Thank again.

 

[vnReaver]

My writing is too poor

Can english teachers here essess the basic paragraph below? Thank you.

Although it has been many years ago, I never forget the first time to have watched a movie in the cinema. I come from a countryside where I find it hard to find a movie theater. My dream finally came true when I studied university in HCM city. After I had finished the class, I was so joyful to go to the cinema to enjoy the film. I felt so happy when I beheld the chair, the large screen and the modern air-conditioner. While I was enjoying the movie alone, there are many couples hugging together under the fresh air of the AC. The movie lived up my expectation, and that memory never fades in my mind.

It's not poor, but it doesn't sound "natural" to me, mainly because I can feel that you are trying quite hard to include many "difficult" (but weird) words and structures. There also some minor grammatical errors. I will list them as below:

1. the first time to have watched... (cụm dài quá) -> the first time I watched... (chuyển sang mệnh đề quan hệ)
2. a countryside (ngữ pháp) -> the countryside
3, After I had finished the class (ko cần thiết phải dùng thì hoàn thành) -> After I finished the class
4. joyful (sai về nghĩa) -> happy/excited/glad...
5. beheld (từ rất cổ) -> saw
6. chair (đây là ghế ngồi nhà) -> seats (đây mới là ghế ngồi rạp, hiểu đúng hơn là chỗ ngồi)
7. there are many couples (sao lại hiện tại) -> there were
8. hugging together (đã ôm thì đương nhiên là ôm nhau rồi cần gì phải together nữa trời) -> hugging/cuddling/making out
9. fresh air of the AC (khí trời mới fresh thôi) -> cool air from the AC
10. lived up my expectation (ngữ pháp) -> lived up TO my expectation

I can say you are pretty good. Be more confident. You can watch more films or read more blogs by the Americans/British to have a better feel of how they actually say it. Keep everything simple but correct, rather than complex but weird. Too many people make these mistakes.

 

[12aszx]

I got a haircut today after two days in the queue—the first time I need to gave my phone number to schedule a haircut. The barbershop is being very busy after the reduction in social distance, and it can't hold many people at the same time because we need to keep at least one-meter distance. I feel very comfortable after the haircut and feeling lucky that I didn't cut it by myself as I had planned before.

Hey guys, could you tell me any words to replace "very" in my sentences?

 

[vnReaver]

I got a haircut today after two days in the queue—the first time I need to gave my phone number to schedule a haircut. The barbershop is being very busy after the reduction in social distance, and it can't hold many people at the same time because we need to keep at least one-meter distance. I feel very comfortable after the haircut and feeling lucky that I didn't cut it by myself as I had planned before.

Hey guys, could you tell me any words to replace "very" in my sentences?

"Really". But don't use it in academic writing.

 

[TulanhNoMot]

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[khactiep94]

recently i have been trying to learn the glossary of banking and finance, though i have been looking up from lots of sources, i am still struggling in this field. so if someone would like to be my instructor or my pen friend, i am waiting for you, desperately!

 

[Fone Man]

I got a haircut today after two days in the queue—the first time I need to gave my phone number to schedule a haircut. The barbershop is being very busy after the reduction in social distance, and it can't hold many people at the same time because we need to keep at least one-meter distance. I feel very comfortable after the haircut and feeling lucky that I didn't cut it by myself as I had planned before.

Hey guys, could you tell me any words to replace "very" in my sentences?

You can use "really/extremely", or try using stronger adjectives to avoid "very".
http://www.learnersdictionary.com/qa/pretty-fairly-really-very-and-quite
https://www.proofreadingservices.com/pages/very

 

[Fone Man]

recently i have been trying to learn the glossary of banking and finance, though i have been looking up from lots of sources, i am still struggling in this field. so if someone would like to be my instructor or my pen friend, i am waiting for you, desperately!

Sorry that I can't help you since my major is accounting, but the glossary you mentioned is just a list of terms with simple and short definition appearing at the end of the book, isn't it? Why do you want it instead of the whole book with full explanation and examples for each term, mate?

 

[Pax]

It's not poor, but it doesn't sound "natural" to me, mainly because I can feel that you are trying quite hard to include many "difficult" (but weird) words and structures. There also some minor grammatical errors. I will list them as below:

1. the first time to have watched... (cụm dài quá) -> the first time I watched... (chuyển sang mệnh đề quan hệ)
2. a countryside (ngữ pháp) -> the countryside
3, After I had finished the class (ko cần thiết phải dùng thì hoàn thành) -> After I finished the class
4. joyful (sai về nghĩa) -> happy/excited/glad...
5. beheld (từ rất cổ) -> saw
6. chair (đây là ghế ngồi nhà) -> seats (đây mới là ghế ngồi rạp, hiểu đúng hơn là chỗ ngồi)
7. there are many couples (sao lại hiện tại) -> there were
8. hugging together (đã ôm thì đương nhiên là ôm nhau rồi cần gì phải together nữa trời) -> hugging/cuddling/making out
9. fresh air of the AC (khí trời mới fresh thôi) -> cool air from the AC
10. lived up my expectation (ngữ pháp) -> lived up TO my expectation

I can say you are pretty good. Be more confident. You can watch more films or read more blogs by the Americans/British to have a better feel of how they actually say it. Keep everything simple but correct, rather than complex but weird. Too many people make these mistakes.

Thank anh, it helps me alot.

 

[Pax]

Hi dudes,

I have a tendency to use the structures [I feel + adj...] and [It is difficult to...] regularly. Please introduce me some structures to replace it. Whenever I use it, it is as if I transform Vietnamese into English. I find it so boring and poor.

 

[gunz098]

I have a tendency to use the structures [I feel + adj...] and [It is difficult to...] regularly. Please introduce me

[Feel + adj] is an expression of emotion, feeling. I think it's more subjective, IMO
On the other hand, [It's+ adj + to...] is somewhat more objective because there's no actual subject (It is a pseudo subject in this case).
I'd recommend you to use more passive form, also learn more vocabulary to express more in-depth ideas rather than bad, good, poor, rich, ...

 

[12aszx]

Have a nice week ahead, guys!
Time passes so fast, just three days to Vietnam's Liberation Day and International Workers' Day. Will you go to your hometown or stay in the city you're working in? If you have a long time not see your family, I hope you already have tickets or someways to back to your village because it's hard to get bus tickets or air tickets now due to coronavirus pandemic.

Anyways, I feel my sentences aren't natural, could you help me to improve it?

 

[Pax]

Today, I have wasted all day long doing a lot of useless things. It is so disappointed.

I always want to earn a lot of money in order to cover the bills. However, my health have been terrible these days, and my plans have not been finished as the way I wanted.